1.Retarded, irrational, people always think that 鈥渘ew and improved鈥?means better.
2.Always bent by weasel words, advertisement messages often mislead people to buy.
3.Misled by the word 鈥渉elp,鈥?people often think 鈥渉elp鈥?means stop, cure, and solve, but in reality, the word means to aid or assist.
4.To protect themselves from the claims that they make, advertisers carefully use the weasel words, so they can say things that are not necessarily true.
5.Weasel words are more about feeling than fact, about style than substance, used to smooth over an uncomfortable fact.
6.The unfinished phrase will psychologically mislead people to make comparisons between their currently used products and the advertised products.
7.In the ad, a young, beautiful, blonde woman relaxingly raises her both hands in the air, wearing a dark blue sport shirt, stretching her back, seeming like just finished her workout from the gym. Number 1, if you utilize and especially START a written composition with a word that is considered to be mean-spirited and/or NOT politically correct....... you will NOT be taken seriously.
Most people are not aware of what "weasel" words are and your definition is too wordy. A concrete understanding of what a weasel word really is is not clear through your explanation.
Obtain a thesaurus in order to use different words meaning the same thing...The words misleading and misled are too prevalent throughout and distract from the point that you are attempting to get across. In regards to your last entry...I'm quite baffled as to your point and the use of non-existent verbiage. Seeming like, relaxingly raises-do not enhance or assist your ad description nor does it make any sense. I'd give you a C-. Keep trying to expand your use of the English language! Many people don't and it is quite evident (especially on this site!) It is astonishing how many people are unable to intelligently construct an intelligent and thought provoking (as well as correctly spelled)composition through the knowledge of vocabulary,grammar and the use of both! Ain't nothin' wrong witt that there grammer n such! #6 is the only sentence that is clear and concise...
#5 is incorrect in its construction
#4 is weak contruction, passive as opposed to active
#3 same as #4
#2 is passive and weak....too many commas - rearrange the entire sentence. Don't use "always"
#7 is convoluted and "relaxingly" isn't a word...."seeming like" is just wrong....
1# is offensive you should remove "always" and never use "retarded" in anything.... 1.Retarded (and/or) irrational people always think that 鈥渘ew and improved鈥?means better.
**Ummm retaded (and/ or) irrational people is a BIG insult...you might try rephrasing and just say 'Some people always think that "new and improved" means better.
2.Always bent by ambiguous words, advertisement messages often mislead people to buy.
***Never heard of Weasel words in speech or writing - I think you mean unclear or evasive
confusing statement, dodge, equivocal saying, evasion, misleading statement, misleading word,
3.Misled by the word 鈥渉elp,鈥?people often think 鈥渉elp鈥?means stop, cure, and solve, but in reality, the word means to aid or assist.
4.To protect themselves from the claims they make, advertisers carefully use misleading words, so they can say things that are not necessarily true.
***same as #2 -I think you mean misleading
5. Evasive words are more about feeling than fact, about style than substance, used to smooth over an uncomfortable fact.
**Same as the other 2
6. An unfinished phrase will psychologically mislead people to make comparisons between their currently used products and the advertised products.
***Don't use THE us An...the means one and what you mean is any
7.In the ad, a young, beautiful blonde woman casually raises her both hands in the air. Wearing a dark blue sport shirt, stretching her back, she seems she's like just finished her workout at the gym.
***There is no such word as 'relaxingly' you should use Casually - or any of these words- also it's a run on sentence
agilely, airily, breezily, carelessly, casually, daintily, delicately, easily, effortlessly, ethereally, faintly, flippantly, freely, frivolously, gingerly, nimbly, peacefully, quietly, simply, slightingly, slightly, smoothly, softly, subtly, tenderly, tenuously, timidly In sentence 4 u should remove "the" before "weasel words". I think then it will sound better .Also,in sentence 7, u could write "appearing as if she has just finished her workout from the gym" instead of "seeming............." Try it out yourself, doesn't it sound better? The rest are pretty much okay according to me. the correct form of the lines are as follows.
1-Retarded and irrational people always think that "new and improved" means better.
2.Always benT by weasel words. Advertisement messages often mislead people to buy.
3.Misled by the word 鈥渉elp鈥? people often think 鈥渉elp鈥?means TO stop, cure and solve; but in reality, the word means to aid or TO assist.
4.To protect themselves from the claims that they make, advertisers carefully use the weasel words; so that they can say things that are not necessarily true.
5.Weasel words are more about feeling than fact, more about style than substance and is used to smooth over an uncomfortable fact.
6.The unfinished phrase will psychologically mislead people to make comparisions between their currently used products and the advertised products.
7.In the ad, a young, beautiful blonde woman relaxingly raises both OF HER hands in the air, wearing a dark blue sport shirt, stretching her back, LOOKING like just HAVING finished her workout IN the gym 1.Retarded, irrational people always think that 鈥渘ew and improved鈥?means better. [Omit second comma]
2.Always bent by weasel words, advertisement messages often mislead people to buy. [OK]
3.Misled by the word 鈥渉elp", people often think 鈥渉elp鈥?means stop, cure, and solve. However, in reality, the word means to aid or assist.
4.To protect themselves from the claims that they make, advertisers carefully use weasel words, so they can say things that are not necessarily true. [Omit 'the' before 'weasal words']
5.Weasel words are more about feeling than fact, more about style than substance and used to smooth over an uncomfortable fact.
6.An unfinished phrase will psychologically mislead people to make comparisons between their currently used products and the advertised products.
7.In the ad, a young, beautiful, blonde woman langorously raises her both hands in the air. Wearing a dark blue sports shirt, stretching her back, she seems as if she has just finished her workout at the gym. [Have improved the style slightly] |
