Law is something aroused my interest for 1 simple aspect,its eternal optimism best displayed by one of its fundamental aspect "innocent until proven guilty.The sense taht law could give the opportuninty to be an agent of justice to actually know that someone life just got better because of me is the most gratifying thought ever.human beings are weird creatures we are here for freedom and independance and yet we are dependant on law to keep us from going astray.its the one of the reason why i want to be a lawyer.
The power everything controlled by the law.its one field that touches all others n can make areal change other greater good of society.in intermediate we studied about constitutional law n i found the thopic was very interesting n worhty debate n its has served to increase further,my desire to become a lawyer n step into politics.
Now i have the passion not only to become a lawyer but have the strong enthusiasm to become a political analyst.law is one the popular mojor for political advisor.by gettin involved in politics in earlier....volunteer in campaigns and be alert and knowledgeble abt the election n most of all learn how the political process works,do lot of researches,debating and public speaking which i enjoy do all the time are the desirable skills for political analyst.but i believe getting degree from world recognised university would further aid me to be a better person to achive my dreams and to show me a clear way to the door of politics and create higher chances to reach the destination.i want to be ab;e to help people to fullest of my ablity and number of successful politicians began their careers sa prosecutors eg:Rudy giuliani.
no can deny law is the one field that can make real change to a better society ,fight for justice and fairness.the recent malaysia's 12 general election made my desire devloped to desperation where it resulted in multi racial represantation,a real change in parliament and where a number attornies became as politiciansand where it was before a lil corrupted in a system.
and i think as a lawyer i can help people to get out of a sticky situation which could ultimately change the rest of their life..and will be able to open a low costto free law firm in a inner's cities that i enjoy helping people.i want to be a succssful lawyer to protect the society and a politician to serve the society. Law is a subject that aroused my interest for one simple reason: its eternal optimism. One of its fundamental aspects 鈥渋nnocent until proven guilty鈥?best displays this optimism. The most gratifying thought for me is the sense that law can give one the opportunity to be an agent of justice and knowing that someone鈥檚 life improved because of my expertise.
Humans are mysterious creatures. We are here for freedom and independence; yet, without the law, we would go astray. This is another reason why I want to become a lawyer. The law controls everything. It is a field that touches all others and holds the power to effect real change for the better in society.
In intermediate we studied Constitutional Law, which I found very interesting and worthy of debate. Constitutional Law has served to further my desire to step into politics.
Now, not only do I have a passion for becoming a lawyer, but I would also like to try my hand at being a political analyst. Law is a popular major for potential political advisors.
One can get involved in politics early in life by volunteering in campaigns, being knowledgeable about elections, and most of all, by learning how the political process works.
Doing research, debating, and public speaking鈥攁ll of which I enjoy鈥攁re the most desired skills for political analysts. Getting a degree from a prestigious law school would also aid me in my quest for a career in law while also creating more opportunities to guide me to my desired destination in politics. The hard work I would put into attaining this degree would also instill in me a sense of determination to achieve my goals and dreams.
I want to be able to help people to the fullest of my ability. A number of successful politicians, like Rudolph Giuliani, actually began their careers as prosecutors.
None can deny that law is a field that can make a definite change for the better in society through fighting for justice. Malaysia鈥檚 recent general election made my desire develop into desperation. The election resulted in multi-racial representation, a real change in the country鈥檚 parliament, and where a number of attorneys became politicians. When before the election, there was naught but a corrupted system of government.
Finally, I think that as a lawyer, I can help people out of the sticky situations they manage to fall into. This helping hand that I can lend could ultimately change the rest of their lives. I would like to open a low-cost or even a pro bono law firm in an inner city situation, where I think I would be most effective in affecting societal change.
I love helping people! This is why I want to become a successful lawyer where I protect the people and a politician where I can serve society.
That's about the best I could do. It's very flighty. You switch topics alot and do not have a clear thesis.
This still need ALOT of work. This has a LOT of grammatical errors. I think you really need to proofread it yourself again. You are also using some words not quite correctly and that leads to very convoluted sentences. I'll do the first sentence for you, but it's really too much work to do the entire thing.
"Law is something aroused my interest for 1 simple aspect,its eternal optimism best displayed by one of its fundamental aspect "innocent until proven guilty."
Law has aroused my interest for one simple reason -- its eternal optimism which is best displayed by one of its fundamental aspects "innocent until proven guilty". Ummm. this has a lot of errors. read it outloud to yourself and you will see what i am talking about i would look where you could put your punctuation. and use capitalization in spots that it needs.
and i am not trying to be mean but i would use words that sound like you not like someone else
and another suggestion is ask your teacher for help it shows your teacher that you were struggling and that you need help trust me it works Law has my interest for one simple aspect, its eternal optimism best displayed by one of its fundamental aspect "innocent until proven guilty".The sense that law could give the opportunity to be an agent of justice to actually know that someone's life just got better because of me is the most gratifying thought ever. Human beings are weird creatures - we are here for freedom and independence, and yet we are dependent on law to keep us from going astray. It's the one of the reasons why I want to be a lawyer.
The power of everything being controlled by the law(?). It's the one field that touches all others and can make a real change in the greater good of society. !!!!!In intermediate we studied about constitutional law and I found the topic was very interesting and worthy debate n its has served to increase further,my desire to become a lawyer n step into politics!!!I dont understand this whole sentence.. at all!!
Now I have the passion not only to become a lawyer but have the strong enthusiasm to become a political analyst. Law is one the popular major for political advisory. By getting involved in politics in earlier, volunteer in campaigns and be alert and knowledgeable at the election, and most of all learning how the political process works,do lots of researches, debating, and lastly, public speaking, which I enjoy to do all the time are the desirable skills for political analyst. But I believe getting a degree from a world recognized university would further aid me to be a better person to achieve my dreams and to show me a clear way to the door of politics and create higher chances to reach the destination. I want to be able to help people to the fullest of my ability. A number of successful politicians began their careers as prosecutors (e.g. Rudy Giuliani).
No one can deny that law is the one field that can make real change to a better society, fight for justice, and fairness. The recent Malaysia's 12 general election made my desire develop to desperation where it resulted in a multi-racial representation, a real change in parliament and where a number attorneys became as politicians, and where it was before a little corrupted in a system.
I think as a lawyer I can help people get out of a sticky situation which could ultimately change the rest of their life, and will be able to open a low cost to free law firm in an inner city. I enjoy helping people. I want to be a successful lawyer to protect the society and a politician to serve the society.
That's the best I could do. I could barely understand what you were trying to say at all, in some parts.
You have a good vocabulary, but you type like a 10-year-old.
Sorry, but I don't think anyone as dumb as you (judging by your English) could become a successful, profitable lawyer.
Remember to capitalize your i's, and also remember not to use more than one dot. Any numbers lower than 100 are supposed to be written out, with some excepetions. Do not use slang (n, lil, etc..). Law arouses my interest for one simple reason - eternal optimism; best displayed by one of its fundamental aspects, "innocent until proven guilty鈥? The sense that law could give the opportunity to be an agent of justice, to actually know that I have had an ameliorative impact on someone鈥檚 life, is the most gratifying thought. Human beings are peculiar creatures; we are here for freedom and independence, yet we depend on law to keep us from going astray. I find this fascinating and it is my interest in this that contributes to my ambition of eventually progressing to become a lawyer.
The power of the legal system is one field that touches all of us and can make a real change for the good of society. In Intermediate, we studied Constitutional Law and I discovered an interest in the topic as I found it to be a worthwhile debate. The inspiration induced from this has served further to increase my desire to pursue a political career and become a lawyer.
I not only hold the passion required to become a lawyer, but have the strong enthusiasm to become a political analyst.
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Let me know if you want me to continue to do the rest. The content is quite good, but I think you need to proof read it carefully to correct the grammatical errors. Your passion for Law is quite evident from the essay :) |
