How can i adjust this personal statement it sounds crap pleaseee help im ripping my hair out lol =(?

Nursing is such a diverse, challenging and worthwhile career that I really feel it is the right course for me. It is a vocation for people who are practical, conscientious, reliable and who find it easy quickly to establish good, trusting relationships with new people. I have these skills and a genuine desire to help people when they need it most. The role of the nurse is changing in the NHS, with more opportunities for nurses to take greater responsibility for patient care and to become specialists in areas such as intensive care, cancer treatment and other specialties. In studying for a degree in nursing I hope that I will be able to make the most of these opportunities as my career develops.
When i left school after six year and studied for two years to gain my HND i realised i very much enjoyed interacting with people and helping and listening to there needs. I also enjoyed and passed my first aid class where we acted out different situations, i learned how to bandage different areas on the body and what the best help would be to someone who was in an emergancy situation ,vulnerable and needed care. I got a lot of confidence in knowing that i could help someone and use my new found skills in a very positive way.
During my working career in many customer care related roles i have gained a lot of skills that i think would also be an asset to becoming a nurse. When working as a beauty therapist my duty was to to make the client feel as comfortable and calm as possible also that they were receiving the best treatment possible and were in trusting hands. During this time i worked well within a team, was able to adapt to many different situations that arose, I also worked well under pressure during different periods during the year.
I have chosen nursing as a career because i want to feel that I have helped someone to regain their health, independence and dignity whether it is after cancer treatment or a broken bone. I hope that my degree in nursing will be the beginning of a lifelong career that will really make a difference.

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Nursing is a diverse, challenging and worthwhile career. it is a vocation for people who are practical and conscientious. These people readily establish good, trusting relationships with other persons. The role of the nurse is changing in the NHS, with more opportunities for nurses to take greater responsibilities for patient care and specialize in areas such as intensive care, cancer treatment and other specialties. As I study for my nursing degree I find that interaction with others and the abilities to expand my role within the nursing field will bring to fruition my expectations.

After graduating after six years and obtaing my HND (say what this is, do not us initials).This provided interaction with people whch I enjoyed tremendeously. My first aid class gave me experience in emergency care as how to response to the psychological and social needs of the patient in a vunerable setting.

Working as a beauty therapist gave me experience in team work. We were taught to adapt to various situations and to problem solve under pressure which I see as vital in the nursing field.

I have chosen nursing as my career because it is a field where I can grow professionally. I can interact with diverse clientel who need to be nurtured physically, psychologically and socially. I understand that it is a demanding field and I feel that I can come to understna the nuances of a good professional that can make a difference.

I hope that I did not mess up your statement, but I did not have the question before me. Do not concentrate too much on the emotions ME. Like they say, just the facts, mam. Good-luck, you sound genuine.

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